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Wednesday, August 26, 2020

Show don't tell writing

😎😻💨Hello welcome back to my blog. I am going to be showing you my show don't tell writing of me climbing a mountain. We had to show our feelings not tell please enjoy my writing and read it. 


One morning I was climbing a mountain with gloves on my hands, I had a scarf on and a jacket, and long pants. I was hunching my shoulders. I was very tired my back was so sore it felt like ice. I felt like someone was trying to kill me Hunching my shoulder Rubbing my arms. My heart is beating really fast. I can see houses  around the mountain. I feel like I want hot chocolate. I did not look down because if i did then i would feel like I was going to fall. 


3 comments:

  1. It looks like you are enjoying your stroll through the mountains Laiseni.
    Did you see any wild or fascinating animals on your trek?.

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  2. Wow Laiseni, what a great quality piece of writing. I love the way you have described how cold you are feeling. Keep up the great writing!

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  3. well laiseni that's great you look good on the photo and the background.

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